Sunday, August 15, 2010

The fan fiction of “Alice in wonderland” --final



The fan fiction of “Alice in wonderland”

Red queen
I am Iracebeth, the red queen of underland. Now I am in the outland of underland. My sister Mirana banished me. I still remember the last word she said to me “no one is to show you any kindness, or ever speak a word. You will not have a friend in the world”. Yes, this is my judgment. This is because the thing I did in underland is very bloody and cruel.
If everyone treat me like they treat my sister, I think I will also be a kindness girl, or maybe become a good queen in underland.
From I was born, everyone thought I am a stranger, because I had a bigger head than any other in my family. Even this, my parents loves me, they always said “Iracebeth, your head is the cleverest head in the world, the things in your head are treasure.” Even I knew this was just the word they wanted to make me happy, I still thanked them. The childhood in the life is unforgettable .
When I was 3 years old, my sister Mirana was born. In my eyes, she was the best girl in the world. She was beautiful, kindness, and happy. She always followed me and called me Racie. I love her, like she loves me. I was proud that I had such a good sister.
But something changed between my parents and I. they put all their attention on Mirana. I knew this is because she was the little sister. I didn’t care about that. I am the eldest; I will be the queen of underland.

White queen
I am Mirana, the white queen of underland. Now the life in underland is peace and quiet. That is because I banished my elder sister to the outland of underland. She did numbers of bloody things in underland. I had to banish her. Even I love her.
From I was born, I was a happy girl. Everyone loved me, my parents, the citizen of underland, even my sister Iracebeth. My sister is the best sister in the world: she often played with me, read story for me. In my eyes, she was the lovely sister, her big head was cute.
I know underland is the hereditary system. So from I was a little girl. I know Racie will be the queen of underland. I was sure she will be a good queen.

R
If that thing didn’t happen, I think I am still a good girl in underland. One day, I want to ask my father something. Unconsciously, I heard the talk between my parents.
“Martin, this is a cruel thing for her. Please don’t!! She is our daughter!!” my mom cried very loudly.
“Honey, we can’t have any sympathy. This is about the future of underland. This is about the fame of our family,” my father was very excited. I can’t understand what they said. But I know there will be a huge thing in our family.
“But……she just a child, our child…… ”
“Bella, I am sorry for this thing, but to poison Iracebeth is a thing which had decided. This is the destiny, the hereditary system. We must do that. We must make Mirana be the queen of underland. She is the right queen…… ”
“……”
I can’t believe what I heard. Are they my parents? Are they my family?? They are planning to kill me. They will poison me.
Hate. I hate them. I will escape first, and revenge. I left a letter to my sister, only three sentences “Mirana, I loved you. But from now on, I hate you. When I come back, you will die instead of me. ”
I said to myself, I will come back.

W
Racie was escaped. She heard our parents planning to kill her. Oh my god. I was shocked by this news. Even though we have hereditary system, they had not to kill her. She is our family, she is my lovely sister.
She left a letter to me. Just three sentence. I knew she hate me. If I was not born, she will be the queen. She will not be killed. She will have all the things she wants. Next time we see each other, we will be enemy……

R
I lived in a dark bog 10 years. In this ten year, I learnt a lot. I saved jabberwocky. With the help of jabberwocky, I am much stronger than before. I called myself red queen. I know, in marmoreal, my sister becomes the white queen; she succeeded to the throne upon our stupid parents.
As my forces extending, my plan revenge will come true.
Finally, I came back. I killed the king and queen- my parents. I killed lots of people I hated. But Mirana was escaped. I knew she will come back one day, but I will still be the winner!

W
I know this thing will happen one day, but not so fast. She killed back. I even didn’t see her, I escaped with the help of my hatter.
I know this is the fate. This is what I owe her.

R
I become a bloody queen in underland. I always say “off with their head”. I like red, I like blood.

w
My kindness sister has disappeared from the world. Racie become a bloody queen. She always kills the innocent people. Everyone in underland hates her. I know I must lead my champion to stop her.

Frabjous day……

R
I will die in this outland…… I am sick……I am lonely……if I was not such cruel, if I use the right way to get the throne back, now I will have a lot of people love me, than fear me. I miss my sister……

W
I heart a bad news- my sister is sick. She is going to die. I must go to see her for the last time……I must tell her, I love her.

Ending
Red queen fulfilled her dream. She saw her dearest sister before she died……

6 comments:

  1. Hi Lily,
    Good change of your final fan fiction.
    Just use R & w to mark the different parts.
    Good story.
    Jessica

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  2. Hi Lily,
    Yes I like this one better~although you don't have to change it, it was my personal opinion. Anyway,I like this story very much because it is very moving,and Thanks or supporting my idea!

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  3. Hi Jessica,
    Thanks for comments~~
    I still reading your fan fiction~~
    And I will read yours later~~~

    Lily

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  4. Hi lily<>
    First, I will thank you give me such a good suggestion.

    And you are welcome~~~hahaha~~

    LILYO(∩_∩)O

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  5. Hi Lily,
    Thank you read my fan fiction, I hope you like it and I am happy to see your feedbacks.

    Jessica

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