Saturday, August 14, 2010

Fan fintion Draft

After the too robbers shot Chuck and rubbed the ring which he was going to proposed to Blair, they run off. Chuck was lying down on the freezing, hard ground, and bleeding. He said Blair’s name, quietly. A few minutes later, Nate came. He saw Chuck was shot and called 911 immediately.
Half an hour later, many people have arrived to the hospital. Lily’s mother Cici, Eric and Rufus were the earliest. They were at the reception doing the paper work and paying for the operation as Dan and Vanessa came.
“How is he?” Dan was worried.
“I don’t know. The doctor is still in the operation room. But luckily, he said Chuck didn’t lose much blood. So he should be fine.” Rufus explained.
“Oh poor kid. He has lost his father, his mother betrayed him, and the only person he cares about the most, Blair is gone. Now someone just gave him a bullet! How miserable could he be!” Lily said with tears.
“Don’t worry, he will be fine.” Cici gave her a hug, tries to comfort her daughter.
Everyone fell into silence. They are waiting, hoping Chuck would be fine.
Another half an hour later, the operation light is off. Lily and Rufus walked to the door as quick as they can, waiting for Chuck and the doctor. Thirty seconds later, Chuck was out. He was lying in the bed. His eyes were closed, tightly, but a name kept coming out of his mouth: “Blair… Blair…”
Everybody was looking at each others; they did not know what to say. The doctor’s coming broke the silence.
“Doctor, how is he?”
“Mr. Bass is fine now, but he needs rest. He should be staying in the hospital and we will do several checks to make sure that his body is fine.”
“Thank god!” said Lily.
“But from what I see, I think there is one more thing he also needs, which is a girl called Blair. He kept repeating her name. If you can get this girl, it will be much helpful for his recovery.” After finishing this, the doctor left.
Silence, again.
“Well, I’m going to check on Chuck.” Vanessa broke the silence. Then she left with Rufus and Dan. Eric followed them.
“So, what do you think?” Lily turned around to her mother.
“About what?”
“What else could it be? Should we tell Serena and Blair?”
“Oh, I didn’t aspect that you will give a chance to give opinions from your poor mum.”
“Mum.” Lily stared at her, her arms around her chest.
“OK. I think that…”
Cici didn’t have a chance to finish her statement, because Nate interrupted.
“Excuse me, Lily and Cici. Sorry about my interruption. May I have a sentence?”
“Oh Nate! I haven’t seen you since I got here. Where were you?”
“I was at the back f the hospital, thinking about whether we should tell Serena and Blair about it.”
“Well then, tell us your answer, should we or not?” Cici looked at him, asked with a big interest.
“I don’t think we should tell the girls about Chuck. They were hurt, I mean Blair,” Nate corrected his mistake, it seems like he did not want to remind himself that Serena and him have broke up. “Blair was hurt by Chuck and Jenny, now that Blair’s gone, she’s obviously trying to leak the wound by herself. So maybe we should give her some time, let her be alone, when she’s ready to come back, I think maybe that is the time we tell her that Chuck was shot, and more importantly, Chuck would be fine at the time.”
Cici looked at him and smiled, she tapped Nate’s shoulder for a few times. Then she said: “Nate, I can understand what you are worrying about, but the fact is, the truth never sleeps. Besides, Blair has the right to know. I think we all know, although Blair said there are over, she still loves Chuck very much, doesn’t she?”
Nate didn’t say anything.
Hudson, Jenny’s mum’s house
“What?? Chuck is hurt?!”
“Yeah, he’s still in the hospital now, but the doctor said he will be fine.”
Jenny was in her room, she was skyping Eric now.
When Jenny first heard that Chuck was shot, especially for that ridiculous proposal ring, she thought Chuck was crazy, but when she calm down, she found that what Chuck had done, was reasonable.
Chuck loves Blair and Blair loves Chuck, it sounds so natural. They are born for each other. Especially when Chuck’s dad and mum both gone, the only person left behind was Blair. Only now, Blair had left him, would Blair forgive him? Jenny doubts that.
Jenny was recalling that night, the night Blair came to Chuck’s house and told him that she’ll accept him; the night Chuck was going to propose to Blair; the night everybody thought that Chuck and Jenny had slept together.
They actually did nothing. They were lying beside each other for a while, and then Jenny got up, seating on the bed. After a while, so did chuck.
That’s how they slept together, that’s what they did, for “I don’t wanna be alone”.

4 comments:

  1. Hey Lily good work so far!
    You have used a good amount of dialogue that is easy to understand.
    There are a lot of characters in the story which can be hard to keep up with (maybe just because i dont watch this programme)but other than that it seemed like your on the right track to writing a good fanfiction. Looking foward to reading the final and i hope that Blair forgives Chuck =)
    Sarah.

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  3. Hey Lily

    There are a few spelling/grammar errors throughout so be sure to proofread your final copy. I also agree with Sarah that there was a lot of character information to take in which could be confusing to a reader unfamiliar with Gossip Girl, therefore my suggestion would be to try and simplify the fan fiction by editing out any parts or characters unneccessary to the storyline. In saying this, you illustrated the relationship between Blair and Chuck well and got me feeling sorry for the poor guy! Good job and I look forward to seeing how the story progresses...

    Jodie x

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  4. Thank you Sarah and Jodie. I am going to delete some unnecessary parts in order to make it clear.Thank you for your opinions!
    Lily xo

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